Chapter 1 of Act II has been posted.
Please feel free to discuss the story, plot complications, screwups on my part (percieved and real). If you find grammar or spelling errors, please E-MAIL them to me!
Remember: Suggestions are always welcome (and sometimes used).
Go and enjoy the story.
Hikaru
Kewl story, I really believe there could be some really great opportunities for the story if you keep this act in a fantasy world!! And I'm finally getting levelled with the fact that they've changed bodies!
Sorry, but I can't come up with some ideas right now, maybe later!!
Signed Shadowtiger
Ok.. Im afraid I spotted a couple spelling mistakes, accidental ones, and a word mistake.. then I thought.. why am I nit picking?.. I want to read this excellent continuation, not disect it..
Pointy Ears?.. Elves?.. Oh no.. you mean they ended up in the D&D realm?.. with all the races fighting each other for control of certain artifacts?.. like a key or equivalent?
Also, with dragons free to roam being a magical realm?..
Theres gonna be some weird stuff..
Um.. That what Arden was lying on, would it have been his old bear body, and if so, was it a slip of the memory that forgot to mention that it was there?.. or, was it Shielas lap, being comforted?..
Im sorry, I cant help if I am
RodTerl,
Terl the Wyrd
Quote:Ok.. Im afraid I spotted a couple spelling mistakes, accidental ones, and a word mistake.. then I thought.. why am I nit picking?.. I want to read this excellent continuation, not disect it..
You're also ignoring my request that you E-Mail me any spelling/grammar screwups. Or did I just miss them in my mailbox?
Quote:Pointy Ears?.. Elves?.. Oh no.. you mean they ended up in the D&D realm?.. with all the races fighting each other for control of certain artifacts?.. like a key or equivalent
I don't think so. That's such a common theme in fantasy that you can pretty well discount D&D. This reality is original, not based on any book.
Quote:Also, with dragons free to roam being a magical realm?..
Dragons incarnate are different from the guardian dragons of the spirit realm. This land might have them, but we don't know yet.
Quote:Um.. That what Arden was lying on, would it have been his old bear body, and if so, was it a slip of the memory that forgot to mention that it was there?.. or, was it Shielas lap, being comforted?..
I think I have you confused. Arden is in Sheila's body right? Sheila's in his old, 1st round body. There is no bear body because the amulet transformed his bear body back into his human body.
As for what Arden was laying on. Did you forget that she now has a nice, big, fluffy tail?
Quote:Im sorry, I cant help if I am
No apologies (except for not E-Mailing them spelling errors). This kind of feedback helps. Especially if it points out something I missed.
Hikaur
WHOoo-HOO!!!
New Chapter!! /me reads...
Body swap: Now thats pwitty twippy!
(Assuming the hormones in Sheila's body are the cause of Arden's giggles... cool)
Nicely turns things on its head, Arden's combat training probably now useless (Or is it? OR IS IT!!!? *ahem*)
because of Sheila's aparently fragile body, making Arden dependant on Sheila... Any particulat reason for the body swap, or is this just for some fun? :-)
If oestrogen is giving Arden the giggles, I wonder what testosterone will do to Sheila? :-)
/me paces impatiantly, waiting for the next Chapter.. "...How long does a week take to pass again?..."
Loveit, Hikaru, Loveit!
I can not wait for the next chapter!
"Mad" Mike
Oh boy... lots of questions....
Quote:Nicely turns things on its head, Arden's combat training probably now useless (Or is it? OR IS IT!!!? *ahem*)
because of Sheila's apparently fragile body, making Arden dependant on Sheila... Any particular reason for the body swap, or is this just for some fun? :-)
Arden's combat skills aren't useless. They will need to be refined. He's in a much smaller and lighter body. You will note that Arden did take the Wakazashi. A girl likes to feel safe you know.
As for Sheila, He will be stepping out a little on his own in this story. As far as we know, Sheila only disliked guns. Should be interesting.
As for the body swap, yes that's a plot line item. It will be explained at the end of Act III.
Quote:If estrogen is giving Arden the giggles, I wonder what testosterone will do to Sheila? :-)
Good question eh?
Quote:/me paces impatiently, waiting for the next Chapter.. "...How long does a week take to pass again?..."
Actually, I think I'll be doing 2 chapters a week. Probably post on Wed and Sat. If I really get moving on the story, I may post more often, but don't count on it.
Hikaru
mistakes
So what version of MS Word do you have?
It won't do much good if I send Word 97SR2
Highlighted corrections and you can't read it.
I've got Office 2000.
Most folk send me a cut & paste text file. A copy of the line as it exists with a copy of the correction on the line below it. Since I edit the files on-line and not at my PC at home, that makes it easier to find the errors.
It also prevents the possibility of someone sending me a trojan or virus.
So if you don't mind, just send the text in the E-Mail message rather than as an attachment.
Hikaru
Ooh boy, I really like it (chapter 2 that is! :-))
I'm really looking forward for the next chapters!!!!
Signed Shadowtiger
P.s. Thx Kata, for posting my sab pic, It feels good to have a pic for everyone to see!!!! Though it's not that good a picture if you ask me!!!
So, Hikaru, Sheila and Arden stay body-swapped until the very end of Act III? Hmmm...
Quote:So, Hikaru, Sheila and Arden stay body-swapped until the very end of Act III? Hmmm...
I don't know about that. If they got swapped once, isn't it possible for them to get swapped again?
It's safe to say they're stuck like this until the end of Act II
OK...